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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is certainly true that during these days, the major issue that the
environment
 is facing is
lack
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 in the numbers of creatures like
animals
 and vegetation, while some people tend towards the viewpoint that there are other prevalent problems
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 the
environment
. In my point of view, I would have to support the idea that weak wildlife might impact the
environment
 and I believe that
animals
 and
plants
 play
vital
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 role across the globe. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that the reduction of wild creatures is the basic environmental issue. One of the main reasons can be that people benefit from
plants
 and
animals
 in their lives,
such
 as eating some of them and using them in various things like industry. Another reason could be that trees and
plants
 produce oxygen through photosynthesis into the atmosphere, which means that cutting
plants
 and deforestation will lead to serious dangerous troubles.
For instance
, carbon dioxide emissions result in increasing global warming.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make an opposing case that in fact, there are plenty of important problems referring to the
environment
.
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 of the major reasons can be that contamination is becoming more widespread in many different parts of the developed world and has vast types,
such
 as water,land,noise, and air pollution.
As a result
, it might influence humans' health and physical states and
animals
 as well. A particularly good example here is that The World Health Organization defined sounds that
excced
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exceed
 75 dB as a
nosie
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noise
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 and interrupt peoples' health. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, In my perspective, I think that nowadays, our
environment
's enormous problem is the lack of assign species.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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