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Some people believe that smartphones are destroying social interaction today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Smartphones
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 and other digital devices are an integral part of our life,
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however
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 some communities still have an approach that
smartphones
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 damage social
interaction
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 among society. I completely disagree with
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 statement and the reasons are analysed in
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 essay.
Firstly
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, the communication and social
interaction
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 among
people
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 had the physical shape for ages and
unfortunately
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 physical communication had daily limits. It was impossible to interact with several groups within a day.
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,
people
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 with the lack of ability to communicate encountered daily difficulties of social
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, while
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 and the digital boom changed the circumstances. The invention of
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 and social media platforms had a significant impact on social
interaction
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. To be more clear,
smartphones
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 have enabled
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 to communicate more easily with the help of social platforms like Facebook and Twitter, where
people
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 can talk and share their opinion and feelings at a global level.
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, several pandemics
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 as Covid19 or previous Influenza, swine flu or others had the worst impact on social
interaction
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 for societies. Mobility fell through society and direct communication and
interaction
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 minimized. Different communities arranged to keep social
interaction
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active
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 with the help of these devices. Video calls, free messaging apps and other technical specifications of
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 simplified the situation and minimized the negative impact of the pandemic on
interaction
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 through communities and social groups. In conclusion,
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smartphones
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 had some negative effect on one-to-one connection, the positive effects are significantly big. Social
interaction
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 has been reduced by the use of
smartphones
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.

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Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limit
  • face-to-face communication
  • social media
  • loss of real connections
  • distract
  • engaging
  • empathy
  • personal connection
  • addictive
  • isolation
  • enhance
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