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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Some
people
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 suggest that living in the countryside help
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 easier to get good
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, while others think their
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 will have more advantageous when they living in downtown.
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 essay will discuss both views, in my opinion, I believe that living in urban is more lucrative to have better
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. On the one hand, I concede that lifestyles in
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rural living more straightforward.
Countryside
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 is really helping
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 improve mental
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 and their wellbeing, reduce stress and anxiety, and generally make them feel happier.
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,
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 have the opportunity to eat fresh, organic foods grown by themself, while busy living in the country grab really meal isn't always the best quality.
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, external
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factors
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 abundance of trees and grass, natural sunlight, which improved air quality in your living area, so escaping
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 polluted air means better breathing for
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 life. On top of that,
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 seem too subjective in their
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 protection as
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health
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 check, I cannot believe that they can live a healthy life without getting sick.
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 villages are beautiful and have a nice atmosphere,
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 city life prone to enhance
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’s
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 comprehensively.
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 is an important problem are being common,
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people
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 are fully concern in both medical and science facets to maintain a strong healthy lifestyle. If
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 were
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 down in
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 with full off national and international hospital where provide ample medical facilities and many well-qualified doctors, they would likely
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 with good medical care all the time.
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, appearing gym centre with a wide variety of exercise equipment and
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 workout environment or having a healthy diet by nutritionists.
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, urban dwellers becoming more aware of protecting and improving their
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 in effective ways. In conclusion, in spite of living in the countryside will enhance mental
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, I think
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 need to concern
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 for a long time with medical support.
People
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 should be free to have a standard
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 in their own way.
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