It is some times argued that too many students go to university, while others claim that a university education should be a universal right, Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own opinion.

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had ab impact on
people
nowadays. Some
people
believe that a
student
should go to
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university
,while others say
students
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themself.
This
essay will discuss both sides. On the one hand, it
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that many
students
who are graduated from school go to
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University
. There are many benefits to learn in
college
.
Firstly
some works
people
have to graduation before they worked in the workplace
such
as a doctor, an engineer others job where the company are
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required
requirement
.
Secondly
, a
student
will get any information from the major which they choose to learn at the
University
. It made
student
easily find a great job and be good a worker because they get a
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knowledge from the professor for 4 years.
On the other hand
, going to
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University
should be their
students
right.
People
can make decisions that they
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or not. Some
students
think that studying in
college
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waste
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of time because they can get money and experience faster than
students
who
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in
college
.
Moreover
,
people
think that learning from
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a book or find
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data from
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are
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enough for working.
Therefore
,
students
can save a lot of money and there are budgets to build their dreams come true. In conclusion,
although
many
students
go to
the
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Unversity to find more information and get a good job, some
student
believe
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it is not
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main factor that all
students
should go the
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University
. In my opinion, it is their right if they do not want to learn in
college
.
Students
can think the way they want to be in the future from themself, and parents should respect the decisions of their children.
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