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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

According to some
people
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, one should accept unfavourable
situations
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 without complaining. Others insist that it is always better to try to improve a negative
situation
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. In my opinion, we do have to accept certain adversities;
however
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, most of the time, it is possible to turn a bad
situation
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 around. On the one hand, some
people
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 believe that bad
situations
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 cannot be changed and
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 they should be accepted. Of course, it is not within our power to change some
situations
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.
For example
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, an unexpected
job
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 loss or medical emergency can put a
person
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 in financial difficulty. Sometimes, there is nothing that a
person
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 can do to improve the
situation
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.
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, if a
person
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 becomes handicapped in an accident, it will affect their ability to work and earn a livelihood. In
such
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situations
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, maybe it is necessary to accept the bad
situation
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 without cursing one’s fate.
On the other hand
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, in my opinion, it is never a bad idea to try to improve
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situation
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.
For example
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, if a
person
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 loses their
job
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, they do not have to live in poverty for the rest of their life. In most cases, they only have to learn a new skill to find a better
job
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.
Likewise
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,
people
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 who have
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bad boss do not have to suffer in silence. If they are bold enough, they can take it as a challenge and find another
job
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 elsewhere. In most cases, fear is what forces
people
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 to be content with their circumstances. If they are willing to take calculated risks, most negative
situations
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 can be improved. To conclude, certain sections of
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society accept bad
situations
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 without trying to improve them.
However
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, in my opinion, with a little effort, it is possible to improve any bad
situation
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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