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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD PROVIDE UNEMPLOYED PEOPLE WITH A FREE ACCESS TO THE INTERNET TO HELP THEM FIND A JOBS.

Nowadays, the unemployment issue represents one of the major dispute of our generation. Because of
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 argue that government authority should invest money to provide the unemployed community with free mobile phone and free access to the internet, in order to help them find out jobs. In
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 idea to aid
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 without a job and
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, I would state my own opinion regarding the matter.
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 of all, some advocates of
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 statement believe that it could be the
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 step to take to enhance unemployment situations all over the world. In fact, in
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, way the nation's governments could only obtain benefits in term of work quality and quantity. It because if jobless
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 cannot allow a mobile phone and access to the internet, they could not meet their perfect work only because the job position is present on an online website,
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, the most outstanding feature to underline is the new “technological Era” that minimum requires an online CV or an online “Linkedin” profile to find jobs.
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, after the period of COVID-19, according to Italy researchers, has been studied that there will be a new networked world where
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 job interviews will carry out only via the web. To conclude, there are many investments that governments should consider before start funding unemployed
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 in
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 way.
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, I think that there are some benefits and advantages compares to spend money in other ways.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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