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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both of these two views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Through years ordinances have evolved in order to build a better society. Nowadays in most countries, the so-called law's evolution must ensure that human rights are protected. Bearing
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 paragraphs. To have a fixed sanction for each sort of crime might sound reasonable for many people, as several crimes are entirely unforgivable and a severe penalty is to be expected.
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, society expects that crimes related to children's integrity receive the maximum sanction possible.
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, in order to grant all human rights, criminals undergo a judicial process as it not the same to hit a minor or to rape him.
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, despite people's expectations, the respective court proceedings and required evaluations must be followed in order to assure a reasonable penalty.
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, reasons and motivations when committing a crime should be evaluated to provide the most accurate punishment possible. Even though some crimes have no explanation, others might have.
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, it is not the same to kill someone for xenophobic reasons or to kill him in self - defence. Unless all factors are considered when deciding a serious legal punishment, judges may incur injustice sanctions. To sum-up, a lot of people believe in fixed sanctions,
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 it is worth evaluating all possible surrounding factors before giving a final word. Studies predict than in the upcoming years, worldwide ordinances will be reformed in accordance with basic human rights.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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