You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to you to express my disappointment about my accommodation at the college ''Blue School'' in Brendale. At the moment I share my room with one more student and the apartment where we staying is too small for both of us.

Moreover

, the room has a narrow shape and there is just one table for both of us.

Also

, The room has

a very small windows

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a very small window

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under the ceiling and during the day is there very poor illumination I am sure that you understand that in

this

environment it's very hard to prepare myself to study. I know that the college offers the opportunity to choose different types of apartments if the students do not feel so comfortable. In other wings of the building are more spacious rooms with

balcony

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and with more furniture. If would be possible to move to

this

apartment we

will

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be so happy. I hope that we find

out

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apply

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a solution to our situation.

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Yours

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Your

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Yours

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faithfully, Petr Kroupa

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coherence cohesion

Your letter is well-organized and coherent, but ensure each paragraph has a single idea to enhance clarity.

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Make sure to provide more details about your specific problems to achieve a complete response, such as noise levels, cleanliness, or any other particular issues you face.

suitable writing tone

You maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for this context.

logical structure

The letter has a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

single idea per paragraph

Each paragraph generally focuses on one main idea, making the text easy to follow.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

168 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
study environment
privacy concerns
alternative accommodation
single room
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