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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to you to express my disappointment about my accommodation at the college ''Blue School'' in Brendale. At the moment I share my room with one more student and the apartment where we staying is too small for both of us.
Moreover
, the room has a narrow shape and there is just one table for both of us.
Also
, The room has
a very small windows
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a very small window
very small windows
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 under the ceiling and during the day is there very poor illumination I am sure that you understand that in
this
 environment it's very hard to prepare myself to study. I know that the college offers the opportunity to choose different types of apartments if the students do not feel so comfortable. In other wings of the building are more spacious rooms with
balcony
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balconies
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 and with more furniture. If would be possible to move to
this
 apartment we
will
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would
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 be so happy. I hope that we find
out
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apply
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a solution to our situation.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Petr Kroupa
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-organized and coherent, but ensure each paragraph has a single idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Make sure to provide more details about your specific problems to achieve a complete response, such as noise levels, cleanliness, or any other particular issues you face.
suitable writing tone
You maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for this context.
logical structure
The letter has a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph generally focuses on one main idea, making the text easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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