Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Art plays
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role in our society. but many people believe that investing wealth
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creatives by Government is not good because, there are numerous factors
such
as health care, education and many more, where
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should be invested.
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essay will argue why ministry should raise hands for the help of artists plus why should spend on other sectors.
First
of all, art galleries are indispensable to preserve our culture and tradition. And these places can just
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with the marvellous craft of creatives. So, the predominant reason to give
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grant to experts is that they are imperative for the existence of our culture.
However
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sort of work become great tourist attractions.
For instance
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Indian
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PM prepared a huge statue of Mahatma Gandhi in Delhi where he spent 200
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.
This
is
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a piece of charm to attract foreigners.
On the other hand
, there are multitudinous sectors like medicines,
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which is vital for the progress of
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society.
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have to finance
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these main projects because others are secondary.Add to it,
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is
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need for today's society as well as hospitals are
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essential.
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,
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would not go to any museum for treatment plus he
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doctor
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for medicines, not any craftsmen. To conclude, our ministry should maintain balance in both criteria. According to me,
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have to pay more attention
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health centres and education centres and after that, they have to provide fund to art sectors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government patronage
  • cultural heritage
  • national identity
  • creative industries
  • unnecessary expense
  • essential services
  • democratize
  • private patronage
  • market forces
  • innovation
  • boost tourism
  • subjective nature
  • allocated ineffectively
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