Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Art plays

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role in our society. but many people believe that investing wealth

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creatives by Government is not good because, there are numerous factors

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as health care, education and many more, where

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should be invested.

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essay will argue why ministry should raise hands for the help of artists plus why should spend on other sectors.

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of all, art galleries are indispensable to preserve our culture and tradition. And these places can just

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with the marvellous craft of creatives. So, the predominant reason to give

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grant to experts is that they are imperative for the existence of our culture.

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these

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sort of work become great tourist attractions.

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PM prepared a huge statue of Mahatma Gandhi in Delhi where he spent 200

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This

also

a piece of charm to attract foreigners.

On the other hand

, there are multitudinous sectors like medicines,

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which is vital for the progress of

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society.

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have to finance

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these main projects because others are secondary.Add to it,

study

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primary

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need for today's society as well as hospitals are

also

essential.

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patient

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the patient

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would not go to any museum for treatment plus he

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doctor

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for medicines, not any craftsmen. To conclude, our ministry should maintain balance in both criteria. According to me,

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have to pay more attention

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health centres and education centres and after that, they have to provide fund to art sectors.

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Topic Vocabulary:

government patronage
cultural heritage
national identity
creative industries
unnecessary expense
essential services
democratize
private patronage
market forces
innovation
boost tourism
subjective nature
allocated ineffectively

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Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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