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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Income, from
salaries
, is the primary source of livelihood for most families.
Although
 a part of the population thinks that
this
 is beneficial for the nation, there is a significant number who still believes that
salaries
 should be regulated by the
government
,
thus
 limiting the amount of money one can make. Though the essay elaborates on both
the
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views, in my
opinion
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 there should be minimum to nil
government
 regulation on the amount of money that people make.
Salaries
 are given by institutions to their employees based on their performance at
work
.
Thus
, any hike or decrement in
salary
 works in a ‘carrot and stick’ manner. Good
work
 is credited and any dereliction of duty, punished.
This
 promotes the
salary
 earner to
work
 harder and better.
Also
, it generates
a
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healthy competition amongst colleagues which improves efficiency in project
work
. One of the downsides to
this
 is, it may create
an
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unnecessary and fierce competition among peers, leading to a stressful
work
 environment.
Government
 control over
salaries
 is a measure to prevent
such
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 competition. But,
this
 is far from reality. Regulation over
salaries
 promotes complacency in the staff and may lead to nihilistic depression. If an employee knows that his
salary
 is going to be capped at a certain level, he will never try to increase his efficiency at
work
 once he reaches his
salary
 limit.
Government
 intervention
also
 discourages the employees from acquiring new skills and implementing them at
work
 as the amount of money earned stays constant.
Thus
,
government
 control has little in its favour and the advantages of having no regulation over earnings of salaried employees far outweigh the drawbacks.
Hence
, I feel that there should be no federal control over
salaries
.
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