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Do you agree or disagree with situation? Parents are the best teachers.

#situation #parents #teachers
Childhood is that stage of life that needs great love and support. It is believed by some that guardians are great mentors.
This
 essay will have full agreement with
this
 opinion and will explore
this
 perspective in the upcoming paragraphs.
Although
,
parents
 are immensely responsible for the children’s growth or development, others
such
 as School teacher, Adverts, Celebrities and many other social factors have some importance too in shaping the children. As
,
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 youngers do spend some time with them
also
. It seems undeniable that mother-father has a
a
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great influence on their kids, 24 hours, they are together which boost their mutual understanding and trust in each other.
Also
, youngers are much more familiar with their
parents
, as they know them from birth, which makes them more comfortable and trustworthy toward them. To exemplify, from birth to adulthood, they learn a variety of
skills
 from
parents
 like moral
skills
, ethics, interpersonal
skills
 etc. Linked to
this
 is the fact that guardians have a strong bond between them and their loved ones, genetically transmitted genes make them more reliable on learning from them, as youngsters would likely to feel more motivated to learn or imitate their
second
 copies.
Moreover
, children feel safe and secure in their hands.
For instance
, if a toddler is introduced to any stranger, ignorance by a toddler becomes a hindrance while communication, whereas ,
parents
 can easily communicate;
also
 develop interpersonal skill between stranger and child. To sum up, learning
skills
 would probably well develop or flourish by the
parents
, as they are more understanding about their offspring, implement their views more efficiently and with great accuracy to devise more positive outcomes.
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