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Do you agree or disagree with situation? Parents are the best teachers.

#situation #parents #teachers
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Childhood is that stage of life that needs great love and support. It is believed by some that guardians are great mentors.
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 opinion and will explore
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,
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 are immensely responsible for the children’s growth or development, others
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 as School teacher, Adverts, Celebrities and many other social factors have some importance too in shaping the children. As
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 youngers do spend some time with them
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. It seems undeniable that mother-father has a
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great influence on their kids, 24 hours, they are together which boost their mutual understanding and trust in each other.
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, youngers are much more familiar with their
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, as they know them from birth, which makes them more comfortable and trustworthy toward them. To exemplify, from birth to adulthood, they learn a variety of
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 from
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 like moral
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, ethics, interpersonal
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 etc. Linked to
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 is the fact that guardians have a strong bond between them and their loved ones, genetically transmitted genes make them more reliable on learning from them, as youngsters would likely to feel more motivated to learn or imitate their
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, children feel safe and secure in their hands.
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, if a toddler is introduced to any stranger, ignorance by a toddler becomes a hindrance while communication, whereas ,
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 can easily communicate;
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 develop interpersonal skill between stranger and child. To sum up, learning
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 would probably well develop or flourish by the
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, as they are more understanding about their offspring, implement their views more efficiently and with great accuracy to devise more positive outcomes.
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