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Some people prefer online classes, while others think it is better to be in a traditional classroom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Since technology is evolving dramatically,
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of
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 virtual classes has surpassed traditional classroom teaching;
however
, some support the latter. In
this
 essay, both of these views will be discussed,
also
, I will highlight why online
education
 is beneficial over the usual teaching method. Those who
supports
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 classroom teaching believe that it gives a child
proper
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 study environment.
Moreover
, when a student is at
school
 under the supervision of a teacher, they tend to concentrate on their learning more than what they might do at home. Few pupils,
for instance
, can promptly approach their professor in case they have any doubt which,
however
, could not be done if they are attending sessions remotely. Some believe that if schools do not ban online
education
,
then
 it will hamper children's cognitive ability.
Thus
, it should be shunned.
In contrast
, some support at-home
education
, mainly, due to the COVID-19 outbreak. Though the situation has abated, parents are reluctant to send their wards to
school
, for physical interaction with professors and peers might
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 not only the child's but
also
 the entire family's health. As a matter of fact, it has been observed that eight out of ten students who are going to
school
 to attend classes have tested COVID-19 positive,
as a result
, putting their families in grave danger.
Therefore
, it is prudent to avoid traditional
education
.
Likewise
, I personally prefer learning from home to physical learning because of two reasons.
Firstly
, it is economical; since the world has plunged into recession, due to the
corona virus
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 lockdown, it would help people regulate their expenses. Another reason is that
school goers
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 can study from the comfort of their homes
though
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 doubt-solving could be a concern,
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they will be able to focus on learning wholly without any distractions from friends and colleagues. In conclusion, even though many people advocate the computer-based learning system, others are against it. In my opinion,
former
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 should be practised diligently and permanently by schools and
universites
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universities
 as it will be less financially burdening on parents, and prompt learners to study comfortably.
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