Some people think that staying in hotels is not a good option to know about a country or its people. What do you think about this viewpoint?

Some
people
opine that
tourists
cannot learn much about a
country
while staying in a
hotel
. I strongly agree with
this
viewpoint because to understand the
culture
it is better to stay with the local
people
and better learning of local foods and languages is not possible in
hotels
.
Firstly
,
better
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a better
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way to learn about a
country
is to
learn
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aboutlearn
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the
culture
of the nation.
This
culture
can be learnt by staying with the local
people
. In
hotels
, local
people
will not stay.
There
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tourists
will find other travellers from different countries. From them they
cannont
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can not
cannot
learn about the local
country
;
nevertheless
, if they stay in
countryside
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the countryside
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, they will learn about local rituals and festivals.
For instance
, in Indian
hotels
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,hotels
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it is very rare that a local person will stay so
tourists
cannot learn about
culture
while staying in
hotels
.
Secondly
,
hotels
do not provide
the
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authentic local dishes and
hotel's
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the hotel's
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staff
donot
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do not
don't
talk in
local
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the local
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language
. Food and
language
helps
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help
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to understand a
country
. If
tourists
stay with the local
people
, they will try the different flavours of the
country
. They will
listen
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their local
language
,
eventually
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,eventually
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start understanding
this
. Understanding a
language
and tasting the local cuisine
are
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is
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the best way to understand a nation.
For instance
, in
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the hotel
a hotel
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hotel
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,hotel
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this
local cuisine is not available. In conclusion, staying in
hotel
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a hotel
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does not teach
the
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tourists
about the real
culture
of nations. In my perspectives, the best way is to stay with local
people
understand the
language
and eat local food prepared by the local
people
.
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