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Nowadays pupils can attend classes online through internet,because large number of universities provide their programs online.This trend has both pros and cons which will discuss in upcoming passage.

The
Internet
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 is a global
information
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 system. Nowadays, the
internet
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 is popular everywhere in the
world
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. The
Internet
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 provides many useful utilities for users but
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
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 specifically.
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, the
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 is a big store of
information
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. Any kind of
information
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 on any topic is available on the
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. You can find it by the most popular search engines,
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google
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, yahoo.
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, you can share
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 with other
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 around the
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.
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, the
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 connects many
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 all over the
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. Stay
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up date
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 with
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the happening
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 in the whole
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 and the new technology and
information
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. You can get
latest
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 news
of
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 the
world
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 on the
Internet
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. Most of the newspapers of the
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 are
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 easier to stay in touch with your friends by chatting, e-mail messages, forum…. Another benefit, there are many services on
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internet
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.
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 movies, and hotel reservations. Especially entertainment, you can see movies,
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 music. You can play games with other
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 in any part of the
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 and there are many games for you
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.
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 Online education is
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internet
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. Many websites provide lectures, books and documents on different subjects or topics. You can
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 your own computer. You can listen and see these lectures repeatedly and get a
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 of knowledge.
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, there are
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 disadvantages. Children can connect to these websites that are for adult only. They can see the
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 which is not good.
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 is perhaps the biggest threat related to your children's healthy mental life. Another drawback, today,
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 is the most popular source of spreading viruses. These viruses create different problems
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 your computer .Viruses that can attack your privacy and get some
information
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 about you. It’s hard to predict what will happen if you were hacked the account
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. The
next
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 drawback is
accuracy
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 of
information
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. A
lot
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information
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the
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websites. Some
information
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 may be incorrect or not. Sometimes you may be confused. Another problem is the wastage of times. A
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 of time is wasted
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the
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information
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 on the
Internet
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. Some
people
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 waste a
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 of time
in
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chatting or
to play
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 games. At home and offices, many
people
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 use
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Internet
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 without any positive purpose. In conclusion, there are many advantages and disadvantages of the
Internet
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. Depend on you, it will be the advantages or disadvantage. You should balance study and play.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • self-paced learning
  • commitments
  • affordability
  • isolation
  • networking opportunities
  • academic rigor
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • course variety
  • educational programs
  • online education
  • traditional education
  • virtual classrooms
  • e-learning
  • remote learning
  • cost-effective
  • social interaction
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