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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#city #life #countryside
People
 have different opinions about where to spend their lives in
cities
 or villages.
Although
 there are several advantages of living in
cities
 , I believe the outskirts are the best place to live in. The main two reasons ,why many think
cities
 are the best place to settle in are several job opportunity and improved medical
facilities
. In ,
cities
 there is
a
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various job available from small manual to high-skilled , which is not easily possible to get in rural areas.
Furthermore
, another reason why
people
 attracted to
cities
 is good medical
facilities
. Many times
people
 lost their lives because of not getting treatment at the right time in various emergency situations. The reason behind
this
 is sometimes unavailability of appropriate medical
facilities
 nearby ,
therefore
people
 want to live in
cities
.
On the other hand
, there are some who strongly are in favour of living in the countryside because of a few reasons .
Firstly
 , good air quality . there is a lot of open space and many trees and greenery present in the countryside ,which provides all the time fresh air to their nearby surroundings.
Hence
 less pollution ,
this
 will help
people
 to save from many health conditions like asthma and lung cancers.
In addition
 to that, there is
also
 the greatest benefit of decreased traffic in rural areas.
This
 is because of the low population and small area and all the basic things available
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 walking distance. So that
people
 use fewer cars and ultimately no
such
 problem of traffic congestion like
cities
. From the above explanation , it is clear that, while there are several advantages of living in
cities
, like in terms of job and medical
facilities
, the countryside has its own charms to live in.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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