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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bars. To what extent do you agree?

#people #prisoners #community #work #bars
In the modern world,
number
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a number
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 of
people
 involved in voluntary activities are becoming lesser and lesser every year.
As a result
, some
people
 opine that prisoners have to be introduced
in
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to
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such
 kinds of activities, whereas other
people
 argue in contradiction to the statement. In my opinion, I totally disagree with the statement.
Firstly
,
people
 who were involved in anti-social activities should be given appropriate punishments
instead
 of allowing them in community
services
 because implementing strict laws on them would help to create awareness in them not to get involved in crimes again.
In addition
,
this
 would help to induce fear not only
on
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 the criminals but
also
on
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 the other
people
 to prevent from leading a disastrous lifestyle.
For instance
,
people
 who were involved in
Delhi
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the Delhi
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 rape case was heavily punished which helped to maintain peace inside the whole country
instead
 of letting them do unpaid
services
 which would have encouraged them to do more crimes.
As a result
 of
such
 examples, it becomes easier for law enforcement officers to manage the crowd in an efficient manner.
Secondly
,
instead
 of compelling them to interact with community
services
, they should be properly counselled in jail on how they should face the challenges in
life
 so that they have a better idea
on
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of
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 tackling difficult situations.
Furthermore
,
this
 would help them to harvest patience and other good qualities which makes them fit as an individual who could do good things for
the
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society without paying them
reward
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.
A
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 best illustration for
this
 is the story
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of Mr.
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Mr.
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Mr
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 Robert Downey Jr., who later became a Hollywood actor who won Oscars many times. Providing him with positive ideas during his
life
 behind bars enabled him to
mold
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mould
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 a successful
life
 and later became part of the community
services
 as well. To conclude, in my opinion, I completely disagree with the statement and believes that involving
people
 who had a bad
life
 has to be prepared well before letting them do unpaid voluntary works and would like to recommend the government to abolish
such
 kinds of laws before proper research on the mentality of these individuals.
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