You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter to apprise you that I am facing many hurdles in my studies while sharing the accommodation with another student. I am currently pursuing a Masters Degree in your college and staying in building 21 and room number 101. The major problem with

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arrangement is that my roommate has a habit of playing the guitar. He is a guitarist and works part-time in a cafe so he practices every day for a couple of hours.

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, my fellow-mate is very unhygienic. He never trashes his residual and likes to stay untidy. I missed my project deadlines as I was not able to focus because of the loud music.

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, I suffered from Malaria disease twice because of the mosquitoes around the garbage under his bed. I would request you to please allow me to shift to a private room. Though that room is smaller in size it has a private washroom.

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, those rooms have noise cancellation main doors which will allow me to concentrate better. I am waiting for your positive response. Yours sincerely, Prateek Gupta.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 9.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
study environment
privacy concerns
alternative accommodation
single room
academic performance
well-being
respectfully request

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