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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by International fast food. Many people think that it is good to eat traditional foods while other believe that fast food is a good choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Fast
food
 lets some people release more of their free time to spend on other necessary things, while others believe that traditional
foods
 are a better choice for their organism. I prefer to keep on the
first
 opinion.
This
 essay discusses both views. According to some, fast
food
 gives us an opportunity to save a lot of time and do not think about what
they
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we
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 need to buy to cook a meal. A lot of human being just buy many processed
foods
 to keep them for a long time.
Moreover
,
like
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apply
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that goods can be bought in a restaurant,
such
 as MacDonald’s, KFC and so on.
For instance
, if some person went to his job in the morning, he would come into one of them and has breakfast.
Besides
, nowadays, folks can just make an order on a web site and they do not worry about cooking.
For example
, if my wife comes back home from her job so late, she always calls some fast
food
 restaurant and makes an order. According to others, traditional meals are more healthy and give us more nutrients. They believe that if children learned how to cook quickly, alongside saving all helpful elements from
foods
, it would be better rather than eating processed
foods
.
For instance
, I remember how my grandmother taught my sister to cook some dishes and now she can make any dishes so delicious. In conclusion, fast
food
 brings into our life a new experience with a diversity of eating, while ordinary meal makes us diet more healthy. I believe fast
food
 changes our life in the nearest future.
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  • nutritional value
  • culinary heritage
  • preserve traditions
  • global cuisine
  • obesity epidemic
  • dietary habits
  • convenience factor
  • food culture
  • sustainable practices
  • local produce
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