Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, environmental condition is a huge concern globally. It is believed by some people that
this
could be solved at
international
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an international
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forum
whereas
other
thinks
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that
this
detrimental effect should be resolved
in
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nationwide. I believe that major causes of environmental
issue
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issues
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can
solve
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be solved
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by global leaders and minor causes by the authorities at the national level. First of all,
contributing
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a contributing
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factor to environmental
condition
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conditions
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is global
warning
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warming
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.
In other words
, various diseases
as well as
climate
concern
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concerns
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occur owing to
detrimental
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the detrimental
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effects of
this
. One clear example,
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in
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India, well known in the field of agriculture, has been dropping production of crops
from
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for
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last
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the last
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10 years
due to
soil erosion which
happen
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happens
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due to
deforestation.
Hence
,
economy
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the economy
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showed pitfalls because of
least
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the least
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export
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exports
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.
Furthermore
, local bodies should reduce
such
issue
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issues
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by imposing strict rules and regulations. Recently,
United
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the United
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nation,
global
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the global
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head of
environmental
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the environmental
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crisis management team, has allocated
fixed
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a fixed
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budget to control problems related to
environment
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the environment
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such
as
construct
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constructing
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a bridge without
affect
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affecting
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forests area
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forest areas
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and
for
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many other concerns.
On the other hand
, there are
few
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major problems
of
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towns and cities which could
solve
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be solved
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by either local municipal or administration
department
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departments
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. Currently,
construction
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the construction
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of buildings and
establishment
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the establishment
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of new factories creating
biggest
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the biggest
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problem which directly imbalance our environment.
For instance
, people migrate towards metro
city
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cities
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for their better jobs and, for higher studies
then
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they require accommodation and builders
do
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vanish plants and make flat land for horizontal or vertical apartments.
Additionally
, drainage
issue
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issues
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should
also
responsible for acute diseases like Malaria, Dengue which is
also
effect
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affect
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environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion, major environmental problems,
such
as global
warning
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warming
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could only be
handle
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handled
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by Senior leaders on
global
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the global
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platform
whereas
local bodies would resolve minor concerns like drainage , permission for construction and industry.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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