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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidences.

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It is undeniable that education is very important nowadays. Many
people
 more consider going to university in different
countries
. Some
people
 believe that it is a good opportunity to
study
 abroad, while others say it has many disadvantages.
This
 essay will discuss both sides. On the one hand, there are many advantages to studies abroad.
Firstly
, to increase their chances of finding a job and a new connection.
For example
, when
people
 going to
study
 outside
countries
such
 as America and England, they will know many
people
 in different
countries
.
Therefore
, when
people
 graduate from their university, it is easier to find a good job or starting their own business.
Secondly
,
people
 ready to solve any problem that comes to their
life
 because they came to
study
 alone and did not know anyone. If they have a problem, they have to solve them by themselves. For
this
 reason, it helps
people
 to get much skill that they do not know before. From my experience,
l
 have to
study
 abroad at one time and
l
 get many skills from many situations that happen in my
life
.
For instance
,
l
 am a shy person, when
l
 go to school it is very hard to make friends with other
people
 that you do not know before.
However
, you have to find a way to solve
this
 problem.
Therefore
, many situations will practice
people
 to grow up and adjust to
life
 in the world.
On the other hand
, it has many disadvantages too.
To begin
 with,
people
 will spend a lot of money to live in other
countries
.
People
 have to pay for their resident, food and many kinds of stuff to stay. If
people
 do not have much money, it will difficult to live abroad.
In addition
,
people
 will get homesick because they have to stay far away from their family. If
people
 cannot handle it, it will affect their mental health. In conclusion,
although
 there are many positives to studying abroad
such
 as get many experiences and many skills, it is many negatives that affect their mental health too. In my opinion,
study
 abroad it is very positives because
people
 get know themselves better through the experiences that occur to their
life
.
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