Give me band prediction and feedback for this IELTS Writing Task 2. Please analyse based on the IELTS public band descriptions and also the substance.

Recently, an increasing number of

people

from rural regions are migrating to urban areas and leaving the countryside with a declining population. I firmly believe it is a negative development which can lead to an escalated unemployment rate and potential environmental impacts. One serious problem that may arise from urbanisation is the worsening number of unemployed inhabitants. Looking for a career is one primary motive for migrating;

however

, only a few consider the competition with existing populations and available opportunities.

As a result

, these

people

are left unemployed for a long time

due to

job scarcity. Jakarta,

for example

, is one of the regions in Indonesia with the highest employment rate owing to citizens from rural-dominated provinces arriving for jobs, whilst many of the current populations are

also

still jobless. Another issue is that urbanisation potentially harms the environment. With

people

moving to settle in cities for good, more open green spaces utilised for eco-parks to filter carbon emissions will decrease as residential areas will replace them.

Moreover

, insufficient public transportation may arise as a new issue, and

people

will drive their private vehicles, leading to higher traffic congestion.

For instance

, many commuter trains and public buses in Jakarta are always overcapacity on business days, even outside rush hours.

As a result

,

people

in Jakarta think it is better to have private vehicles

such

as motorcycles or cars that contribute nothing but more traffic. In conclusion,

although

moving to cities might grant

people

from the countryside opportunities to build their careers, it is generally a negative trend as it may lead to more jobless citizens and harmful environmental effects.