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some people think the spread of multinational companies and globalization produce positive outcomes for everyone.do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In present years,multinational organizations have been increasing in number which could
also
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the economy of any country and
globalization
also
 produce
positive
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 trend towards
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 output.It is believed by some that
this
 should deliver better growth. I strongly reckon that more and more global companies would present outstanding result with
globalization
. Analysing the parameters which support
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development towards the establishment of
new
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a new
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 multinational company.
First
 of all, multinational companies should raise
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employement
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employment
 rate which will support for better future of any employee.
In other words
,
this
 is creating huge jobs, as well as, give
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attractive packages or incentives to their workers which aid for their day to day life.
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Furthermore
, an organization should provide plenty of courses that could become
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 for individual growth.
Hence
,
indroducing
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introducing
 new multinational industries or factories help to learn various culture and diversity of
different
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nation
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.One clear example,Shiv Kumar,who has a business of logistic ,
setup
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 a firm in
United
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 state and provide an option to give
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 opportunity to their clients and outstanding staffs through which he had gained a tenth profit in almost 5 years.
Also
,
member
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 of their team
feel
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 happy and complete
assigment
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assignment
 on time.
Secondly
,
globalization
 is
also
 beneficial for everyone owing to learn about globally that could teach us on different aspects of business which run on an international level.
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, students
migrant
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 for higher studies wherein
company
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 send their best of best employees for learning new process and updates on
global
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the global
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 stage. Recently, the Indian government has allocated a fixed budget for new factories which
are already do
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 their operation in many other nations
such
 as Ali Baba,well known in the field of
cloth
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the cloth
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 industry. In conclusion,
i
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 would say that
the
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globalization
 and
the
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multinational companies would deliver better result not only for employees
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but
also
 for employers.
Moreover
,it is helpful for personal development too.
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