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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Other believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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States are very eager to be an organizer of any kind of games in their region.
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, there are drawbacks if they are rendered in
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's area. From my perspective, it is a good idea to execute playings in a native place. There are both advantages and disadvantages
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this
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 argument.
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 with, sports is the key factor
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 acquiring knowledge.
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, it gives us a
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 of pleasure.
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, to keep
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's healthy there is no alternative way of playings.
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, arranging sports in
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's
country
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 can provide a
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 of enjoyment where it cannot be expressed in
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 word.
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, it can be proclaimed to other countries if a government can get the opportunity to arrange games in their
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.
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, arranging games can confer a
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 of fame of
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's state where it can be spread very quickly which gives them a
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 of pleasure.
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, there is a
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 of expenditure where it creates a
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 of economic impacts. The Authority of a state has spent adequate money. Spending decent wealth cannot provide the improvement of the
country
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. To demonstrate, a
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-sided expenditure constructs conflict which affects another sector of the states.
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, if all wealth is spent on
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 side the remittance of the
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 cannot pour an equal balance where people are deprived. In conclusion, arranging sports in the native
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 is a proclaiming issue where it can be announced all over the world.
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, money is spent huge and it creates a harmful aspect in the
country
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.
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