Some people believe that the expansion of tourism is ruining the culture of a country, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Recent
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few years we can observe how a
toursim
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tourism
helps to support and develop step by step the
culture
of different countries, while some people suggest that, it harms the
culture
itself.
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appearance
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the appearance
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similar thoughts and
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and give possible ways of solution.
Firstly
, I would like to say that the
culture
for any nation is a significant thing,which is an inseparable bounded with their ancestors and origins.
Therefore
, Any nation will take
care
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and appreciate their
culture
.
Secondly
, tourists, who arrive and visit
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countries not always
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with respect to foreign cultures. The majority of tourist even aren't able after a while clean up the garbage after themself. In my opinion, similar intruders should be fined for their behaviour, and from received money to invest in developing
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the
culture
.
In
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the other hand, Of course, a stream of tourists, who give a certain opportunity for
further
developing
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in the form of fund,which they put into while they are situated in any visited country, especially in
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the summer
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summer time
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summertime
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, because it is
a
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added stimulus, to support the
culture
, which includes reconstruction of old buildings,churches, the main squares of
townes
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towns
Townes
and e.t.c.
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, in my country, which is Italy, foreign people, who visit my country sometimes behave
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in relation to monuments and other attraction. In conclusion, I would like to add that We must respect and appreciate any indigenous
culture
and not afford foreign people
behave
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to behave
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not respect in relation to local order and the indigenous
culture
.
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