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Countries with long average working hours are economically more successful than those countries which do not work long hours. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been considered that the higher number of working
hours
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 is beneficial the success in the
economy
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 of a country
in contrast
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 to other nations with lower average working time. I disagree with that perspective, and the following essay will provide
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reasons. Thinking that long
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 of
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 guarantee more work is done seems obvious;
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, some successful countries with leading economies have demonstrated the opposite by being very productive with a reduced schedule, and less
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 time.
Such
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 is the case of countries like Germany, which has been recognized to have the lowest average number of
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 worked annually, which is 1400, and yet it is the
third
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 strongest
economy
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 in the world which is worth 1.3 trillion dollars. Their focus has been mainly on utilizing more technology, and a philosophy to work smarter rather than harder.
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, a different scenario is seen from nations that have the perspective that longer schedules will grant a higher yield in the
economy
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. Unfortunately, the extended working periods do not necessarily bring the expected results. According to “The World In Data” a website dedicated to sharing statistic trends worldwide showed that South Africa that has relatively weak finances has the toughest working conditions, and has an averaged of 2300
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 that a worker has to do yearly. In conclusion, a more extensive schedule in the workforce does not necessarily translate into more productivity and a more efficient local
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,
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, governments could implement a system similar to the one used by Germany based on High-Tech and innovative ideas.
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