More people are stressed today than ever before. What are the causes of this stress? What can be done to address this problem ?

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Human beings of our contemporary society are more
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than the former generation of the world. There are several factors
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likely to trigger
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issue,
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, in my opinion, the most noticeable are
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of
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enrollment and competition at
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. Government is responsible to tackle
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question.
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with, an increasing number of problems in today's world are impacting people to be stressful, and some aspects are attributed to
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tendency.
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and foremost, these days, young adults have pressure on their shoulder due to
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. In some
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countries, there are three or four stages of being accepted to the
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, albeit it was merely one exam
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decade.
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reason, adolescents feel nervous about getting admitted to the
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.
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, there
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no competition
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decade compared to nowadays. An array of adults has the prestigious formation of foreign countries, meanwhile, old ones outweigh by having experience. According to
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, there is a hint of being stress
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both sides. Several solutions can mitigate these problems in order to allow people
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themselves
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more relaxing.
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, education centres should alleviate the process of admitting the students
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or put on priorities the most successful and diligent students.
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, it would be a great idea, if governments launch a lot of brand new workplaces in order to provide their population with different vacancies. Only by commencing new businesses would people see finding a job more reasonable. In conclusion, from my point of view, whilst certain issues can cause
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problem, government and
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universities
are able to help individuals not feel any fear regardless
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their work or education.
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