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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Inculcating discipline is critical to a
child
’s development. As per many
parents
, corporal punishment is the best means of doing
this
.
This
 essay will argue why smacking
children
 is entirely unnecessary despite some people believing
otherwise
. A lot of people use physical
violence
 on their
child
 in order to reprimand them.
This
 is because it is ingrained in their system that hitting a
child
 is the most effective way to control bad behaviour. Having experienced it
first
-hand by their
parents
, they feel it is justifiable as inflicting pain would help them learn better. Indeed, there have been some recorded instances of
children
 reacting positively to
violence
, thereby curbing their temper tantrums. These few examples have bolstered existing beliefs in
parents
 that smacking a
child
 is essential. Even though physical beating might work for some families, the idea that it is the best form of discipline is completely preposterous. By resorting to bodily punishments,
parents
 instil a sense of fear among
children
consequently
 leading them to become meek and submissive and hindering their mental development.
In addition
, they tend to normalize
violence
 as a manifestation of power resulting in them developing a violent streak. A recent study conducted on
this
 topic concluded that a vast 60% of the
children
 suffered from anxiety and trauma
as a result
 of being smacked and about 40% of them became increasingly aggressive.
Therefore
, the notion that
violence
 is an efficacious instrument of
child
 discipline, is not only ill-informed in itself, but
also
 potentially dangerous. To sum up, hitting
children
 may be seen as a useful way of disciplining them according to some people, but it is by no means an ideal one.
This
 essay argued why the use of physical
violence
 can be detrimental to a
child
's cognitive development. In my opinion, smacking a
child
 affects them negatively and as
such
, is absolutely unacceptable.
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