The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

In our modern society, an array of articles are written about harm repercussions of
cigarettes
,
however
, severe
people
are not able to afford the termination of smoking. Reasons
of
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this
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nevertheless
, the most imperative ones that
people
have a lot of problems in their lives, and some adolescents have the hype about
smokking
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. Individuals themselves have to take steps in order to mitigate the potential problems of smoking.
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with, there are a number of reasons
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people
's
habit
to smoke which is very harmful to their well-being.
First
and foremost, there is a general consensus that smoking helps to reduce stress and forget about daily issues for a while. For
this
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reasons, human beings commence obtaining
cigarettes
, which generates
the
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detrimental
habit
.
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,
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of tendency among young adults induces
of
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immitating
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to each other. When youngsters smoke
cigarettes
in a public, they feel cool owing to hype among peers.
However
, some actions could be taken in order to solve or alleviate the aforementioned question.
Initially
, it is widely known that
sudden
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termination of smoking is very dangerous to
people
's heart due to
the
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daily
habit
.
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, humans should decrease the
quantity
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of
cigarettes
day by day, which would provide to complete
the
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smoking at all after the period of time.
Furthermore
, there are some alternatives to
cigarettes
such
as
electron
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cigarette or shisha that have
less
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detriments compared to
cigarettes
.
Thus
,
people
may supersede them on e-
cigarettes
that would kill the
habit
of smoking. To recapitulate,
existence
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of stress and
trend
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of getting
cigarettes
impact
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humans' health,
although
, certain measures can be taken to solve
this
problem.
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