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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

#dangers #people #habit #society
In our modern society, an array of articles are written about harm repercussions of
cigarettes
,
however
, severe
people
 are not able to afford the termination of smoking. Reasons
of
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this
 vary,
nevertheless
, the most imperative ones that
people
 have a lot of problems in their lives, and some adolescents have the hype about
smokking
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smoking
. Individuals themselves have to take steps in order to mitigate the potential problems of smoking.
To begin
 with, there are a number of reasons
affect
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people
's
habit
 to smoke which is very harmful to their well-being.
First
 and foremost, there is a general consensus that smoking helps to reduce stress and forget about daily issues for a while. For
this
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 reasons, human beings commence obtaining
cigarettes
, which generates
the
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 detrimental
habit
.
Secondly
,
existence
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 of tendency among young adults induces
of
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immitating
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imitating
 to each other. When youngsters smoke
cigarettes
 in a public, they feel cool owing to hype among peers.
However
, some actions could be taken in order to solve or alleviate the aforementioned question.
Initially
, it is widely known that
sudden
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 termination of smoking is very dangerous to
people
's heart due to
the
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daily
habit
.
Hence
, humans should decrease the
quantity
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 of
cigarettes
 day by day, which would provide to complete
the
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smoking at all after the period of time.
Furthermore
, there are some alternatives to
cigarettes
such
 as
electron
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 cigarette or shisha that have
less
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 detriments compared to
cigarettes
.
Thus
,
people
 may supersede them on e-
cigarettes
 that would kill the
habit
 of smoking. To recapitulate,
existence
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 of stress and
trend
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the trend
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 of getting
cigarettes
impact
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 humans' health,
although
, certain measures can be taken to solve
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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