In some countries, the elderly are highly valued and respected, while in other youth is more highly valued. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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the elderly generations while other prefer spending their energy in the young ones. The fact that in some country pensioner are more respected and valued rather than the young one is opinable.
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the reason why,from my point of view,the government should not invest all of
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in one category only. In the modern
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understood the importance of respecting the pensioners
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