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Thanks to development of science and technology, the lifestyle have become more and more similar across the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The rapid spread of
technology
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 and
science
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 has changed the lifestyle of
people
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 the world over. In my opinion,
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 is a positive development which can lead
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 economic,
health
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 and education items.
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 with, there are a variety of elements
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 are significant when considering
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economic items. Primarily,
to keep
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 pace with
science
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 and
technology
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 is a common trend in today’s modern world because
life
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 standards have become the nearly same.
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 to say,
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these
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developments
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 enable to eliminate classification among humankind because
people
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 could easily access any product which they would like to purchase thanks to these
developments
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. The more the
technology
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 grows day by day, the more company products new goods depend on the demand of
people
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. Not only does
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 change the lifestyle of
people
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, but it
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 increases the companies’ production capacity.
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, the development of
science
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 and
technology
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 have simplified many aspects of our social life.
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,
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developments
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 provide many advancements in educational
developments
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. To access
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the information at the schools is easier and faster and
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 ends in huge success when considering past years.
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, the
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 sector ameliorates thanks to the emergence of
technology
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 and
science
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developments
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.
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, gone are the days when
humankinds
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humankind
 die out because of the lack of
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 sector. Take some countries, which care about keeping pace with
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 and scientific
developments
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, as a clear example; had they not strived in order to increase
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developments
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, most of them would not have been successful in both education and
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 life. The main conclusion to be drawn, I do believe that
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 phenomenon is not a negative development for some economic,
health
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 and education reasons.
Submitted by Ahmet Münir KOCAMAN on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convergence
  • globalization
  • interconnected
  • homogeneous
  • phenomenon
  • cultural identity
  • diversity
  • global tapestry
  • dominant global culture
  • consumerism
  • environmental implications
  • resource depletion
  • sustainable
  • uniform habits
  • climate change
  • standardization
  • health and safety standards
  • medical care
  • food safety
  • life expectancies
  • quality of life
  • mobility
  • integration
  • expatriates
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