Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Recently, it has been shown that every nation has been changed and became more equal to other nations due to the same opportunities to purchase the same items everywhere in the
world
. I think it brings positive development for the human being. Generally, new technology and new thought improve our living-style which turn all
countries
into
a
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the

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same frame. Because of global marketing people are able to buy any products from any
countries
in the
world
.
Thus
, they get
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the same

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same
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some

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options to use the products with exact price and quality.
For example
, i-phones are manufactured by
American
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an American

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company called ‘Apple’. After launching its products, people from any
countries
can purchase the original phone through the e-commerce
market
which brings pleasure to the buyer using a brand new product without await for a long time. So, I think every person should welcome
these kind
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this kind
these kinds

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of changes.
Similarly
,
countries
market
share become equal as well as rise their economic trends due to e-commerce
market
platform.
Global
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The global

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market
has no
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border

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boarder
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border

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for the individuals which ensure to earn more revenue for the nations.
For instance
, Ali express,
world’s
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the world’s

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popular digital
market
offers opportunities to the residents of all nations to get their product.
As a result
, around 2.0 billion people around the
world
access their
market
to buy which enhance to achieve foreign money from others.
That is
why I believe that getting any goods from anywhere in the
world
bring positive improvement for every
countries
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country

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. In conclusion,
equal
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an equal
the equal

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platform for every nation makes
countries
more similar to other
countries
that is
beneficial for every human.
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