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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
Humanity has crossed the threshold of the information era and modern society has set off in pursuit of globalisation and internalisation.
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miscellaneous options regarding work, leisure and other aspects of life.
Nevertheless
, in my point of ,view
this
 redundancy of choices gives rise to
such
 a problem as sacrificing quality for quantity.
To begin
 with, technological progress has positive as well as harmful effects on the human decision-making process. On the one hand, new opportunities and possibilities for
people
 have emerged. Every pupil can choose a preferable university and specialization, every person can order anything from online shops, any trip or vacation he or she desires. On the other side, the same person can easily get confused by plenty of offers and adverts. While many
people
 acknowledge
this
 redundancy of options, a lion's share of our choices IS influenced by the media and the internet. Statistics have proven that more than half of
people
's purchases were made under the pressure of commercials.
For example
, if a company didn’t advertise its product in the
first
 place,
further
 selling would be impossible because of competitiveness with other firms, which marketing was more persistent and obsessive. Apart from that, the critical thinking of
people
 has changed by a myriad of propositions and offers. The process of choosing becomes an endeavour. Not only does a person feel exhausted while surfing through the internet and opting for some products, but
also
 can not concentrate and have a break. In consequence, at one point he or she will decide to choose something randomly and spontaneously. To sum up, there are a plethora of options nowadays, but
people
 have to make their process of choosing well-considered and reasonable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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