Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree?

Certain people think that after the
age
of retirement one should not carry on their
work
. I agree with
this
statement. In
this
essay
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I will elaborate why do I think older people cannot carry forward their
work
.
To begin
with, youngsters should get more opportunities to
work
as they are the future. If
young
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generation
get
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a chance to
work
at an early will become professional soon.
Moreover
, they are updated with
technology
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they know about to operate electronics correctly. Whereas older people are not familiar with
computer
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the computer
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they could not
work
effectively in
digitalisation
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world.
For instance
, nowadays all the office
work
is done digitally where 23year old can do more quickly
that
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65year old who is aware of the technology and can take time to do.
Furthermore
, as you grow older body is not physically active. There are many
health related
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issue
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arises after
certain
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age
. A young person can
work
through out
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the day without getting exhausted and can
also
work
overtime but it is not possible with old
age
as they do not have stamina.
For example
, there was a report in Italy as you grow older your speed decreases and maximum productivity become less. In conclusion, one cannot carry on the
work
after
certain
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age
. youngsters should get a break as
senior
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a senior
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citizen would not be possible to
work
better.
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