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Cyber-bullying and cybercrimes are seen to be on the rise today. What are the causes for this? What are the solutions for this problem?

#cybercrimes #rise
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In these modern days’ technology is on
boom
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the boom
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, along with
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 we can
also
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 notice some disadvantages like
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cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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 and
cyber
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-crime. I think
this
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 is a bad sign for the safety and securities issues online. These problems must be controlled for the development and growth of
online
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 industry. The main causes of
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cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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 include revenge,
self judgement
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 to punish the victim, contactless bullying and addiction to bullying. In most
of
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the
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cases the victims are usually known to the bullies, they often target
people
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 who are weak or
people
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 with whom they are having
problem
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a problem
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. As it is a process
from
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online, it is not easy to find out the bullies which is a major advantage for them to continue
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 activities and consider themselves as
supreme
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 being. The solutions to these problems are
simple
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 just block or report unwanted comments, keep a record of
such
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 data in your computer for future use, do not reply to unknown messages, do not argue or converse with unknown
people
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. And complain to government
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cyber security
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cybersecurity
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 websites if any
such
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 issues are faced.
Cyber
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 Crime is a major problem faced by many
people
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 online.
Main
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 causes are easy
access
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, complex coding, negligence and loss of evidence. These causes lead to hacking, stealing sensitive information, unauthorized surveillance, blackmailing, forcing victims to indulge in other
crimes
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 etc. All these problems can be avoided
safeguarding
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by safeguarding
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 your devices with
latest
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 software, strong passwords, control settings, be aware of thefts and report if you are a victim so that necessary steps can be taken to solve the problem. To conclude, one must be well aware
about
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 the types of
crimes
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 and efficient way to handle situations to defend
crimes
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 against them. The more alert we are about the
crimes
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 online, the less is the chance to fall
in
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into
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 a trap.
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