Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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are on the view that extra effort and concern is diverted to save wild animals and birds. I totally disagree with the above fact that extra effort is been put rather less investment and action is been taken by people at present. Deforestation is happening at an alarming rate worldwide impacting the lifecycle of wildlife.

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with, natural habitat and the breeding grounds of species are getting decreased by selfless acts by corporates for housing and construction. For

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white African Rhino losing its life due to the loss of natural space for it to live in.

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,the Amazon forest which is considered to be the largest rain forest in the

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lost 10 % of its trees in the

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2 years which has caused many endangered species to vanish from

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poaching and, hunting animals have been on the rise over

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recent years.

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, some countries,

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as Japan have given government sponsorship to conduct mass killings of whales as a sport .

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the way without any restriction or action to kill animals to be sold at

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market.

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, these kinds of actions without any restrictions will result in the extinction of wildlife to the

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very quickly. In conclusion, it is clear that even if some people believe that extra effort and investment is been put in to save wildlife and birds, the truth of the matter is that it's the quite opposite which is happening and urgent attention is needed to solve

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