Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

ome
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some
are on the view that extra effort and concern is diverted to save wild animals and birds. I totally disagree with the above fact that extra effort is been put rather less investment and action is been taken by people at present. Deforestation is happening at an alarming rate worldwide impacting the lifecycle of wildlife.
To begin
with, natural habitat and the breeding grounds of species are getting decreased by selfless acts by corporates for housing and construction. For
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example, the
world
saw the
last
white African Rhino losing its life due to the loss of natural space for it to live in.
In addition
to
this
,the Amazon forest which is considered to be the largest rain forest in the
world
lost 10 % of its trees in the
last
2 years which has caused many endangered species to vanish from
this
planet.
On the other hand
poaching and, hunting animals have been on the rise over
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recent years.
Firstly
, some countries,
such
as Japan have given government sponsorship to conduct mass killings of whales as a sport .
Furthermore
,
paching
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patching
poaching
packing
which is considered to be one of the
billion- dollar
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businesses in the
world
has
pave
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the way without any restriction or action to kill animals to be sold at
open
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market.
Finally
, these kinds of actions without any restrictions will result in the extinction of wildlife to the
world
very quickly. In conclusion, it is clear that even if some people believe that extra effort and investment is been put in to save wildlife and birds, the truth of the matter is that it's the quite opposite which is happening and urgent attention is needed to solve
this
complex issue.
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