More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

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people
's lifestyle
have
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changed. Nowadays,
people
are willing to have a proper eating plan and regular exercise.
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essay will discuss the purpose of
this
approach and will give options to encourage others to follow the same. There are a lot of reasons which can be taken into consideration.
Firstly
, most actors/actresses, singers, and celebrities like to have healthy food and exercises to keep their body in shape and they publish
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social media to encourage
people
who are interested.
Secondly
, individuals realize the benefit of taking proper nutrition foods and exercises to avoid bad
health
issues.
For example
, suffer from long term diseases like diabetes, heart disease, low/high blood pressure and mental
health
issues like stress, sleeping disorders. After starting diet and exercises they can feel better and prevent those. The education and public guiding system can motivate
people
to have
better
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a better

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lifestyle with minimizing their
health
problems. Schools and
education
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institutes should encourage and teach students to do more physical activities and limit fat intake. Meanwhile, governments and private institutes could raise awareness programs about
consequences
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the consequences

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of taking fatty and salty food.
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motivate
people
about doing exercise that they learned from sports and show the positive effects on
health
and well-being
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instance, they can launch some campaign and media advertising about balanced diet and daily workout. In conclusion, eating healthy foods and exercising
are
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an essential part of life in present days and it can avoid many things
such
as medical bill expenses
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