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More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

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Recently
people
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's lifestyle
have
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 changed. Nowadays,
people
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 are willing to have a proper eating plan and regular exercise.
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 approach and will give options to encourage others to follow the same. There are a lot of reasons which can be taken into consideration.
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, most actors/actresses, singers, and celebrities like to have healthy food and exercises to keep their body in shape and they publish
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 social media to encourage
people
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 who are interested.
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, individuals realize the benefit of taking proper nutrition foods and exercises to avoid bad
health
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 issues.
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, suffer from long term diseases like diabetes, heart disease, low/high blood pressure and mental
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 issues like stress, sleeping disorders. After starting diet and exercises they can feel better and prevent those. The education and public guiding system can motivate
people
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 to have
better
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 lifestyle with minimizing their
health
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 problems. Schools and
education
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 institutes should encourage and teach students to do more physical activities and limit fat intake. Meanwhile, governments and private institutes could raise awareness programs about
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the consequences
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 of taking fatty and salty food.
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Also
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 motivate
people
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 about doing exercise that they learned from sports and show the positive effects on
health
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 and well-being
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 instance, they can launch some campaign and media advertising about balanced diet and daily workout. In conclusion, eating healthy foods and exercising
are
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 an essential part of life in present days and it can avoid many things
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 as medical bill expenses
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