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these days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away. whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened. what are the effects of this change in attitude?

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When I was
child
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 my mother used to put stitches
to
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 clothes of mine,when it got
tored
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stored
tired
tyred
.In
current
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the current
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generation
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 many
people
 would like to buy new things when items got
danaged
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damaged
,
although
 the past generation had given significance to items, even when
it
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they
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 got damaged they used to
repair
it
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them
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 and make
it
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them
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use
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useful
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 for
long
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a long
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 time.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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why
this
 change has
happend
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happened
 and what are the
consequneces
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consequences
for
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of
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this
 change. Technology has been developing much faster than old days.Nowadays,
people
 could order any
item
through
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online.When I was
in
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younger age,I was searching
whole
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the whole
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 town for one nove "Gurajada Apparao".
However
,at
present
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 you don't have to go anywhere just it on your chair keep the order of the book
in
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online,which you need.it would come to your hands in few days of time.
In addition
 to
this
tha
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the
 quality of the product.When you go to the shop you could see the same product multiple times
with
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at
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 varied price.
present
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the present
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 generation is flexible to buy cheaper products,use it for
somedays
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some days
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,
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when it got ruined they throw away.By having these reasons
people
 are throwing
item
 when
it
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they
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 got damaged.
People
 wouldn't think to
repair
 damaged
item
,because they already habituated to buy new things.what if they want to buy
the
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a
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 product which is
on
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in
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 high demand?.
Moreover
,
people
 are spending more on buying new one's rather than repairing it,so it might cause money problems over the years
,
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when they need. In conclusion,
people
 should learn how to
repair
 the damaged one.
otherwise
,
this
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they
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 would
loss
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lose
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 the skill
how
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of how
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 to
repair
 an
item
.
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