The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicines. Government should reflect this . To what extent do you agree?

Health
is the state of complete harmony of
body
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prevention is better than cure.A healthy body reveals a healthy mind.I completely agree with the statement as well as the
government
authorities must invest in
health
care.
This
essay will discuss how authorities can help to prevent disease.
To begin
with,every person deserves a healthy lifestyle.,
,
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Unfortunately
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this
is literally rarely happening in our community due to pollution,contaminated cities and overcrowding.Most
people
are following
the
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unhygienic lifestyle it will lead to many
health
issues,especially in children.
For instance
, in many underdeveloped countries
such
as Nigeria, children are prone to get deadly diseases because of their poor infrastructure and poverty.
Government
has to provide financial investment to improve the living standard of
people
in their country.Authorities should provide a free home with basic facilities.
Moreover
,every individual should get a nutritious diet from the
government
.
Furthermore
,
health
education is an important aspect of preventing illness.Especially in
this
covid-19 season,
people
should be aware of wearing a mask and cleaning their hands from time to time by demonstration or keeping posters in the village.Because
this
is a new situation in folks life,even well-educated
people
are getting infected with coronavirus
then
what more the illiterate
people
.Educating
people
with adequate facilities which is soap and water,mask,gloves and so forth,
this
is the responsibility of
government
.All these preventing measures can control many
health
issues as well as deaths in the population. To conclude,these can be provided only by the
government
.It is impossible to implement by the individual because it needs economical investment.Underprivileged nations are getting financial support from rich countries.In my ,opinion
this
amount to be invested for the needy
people
.
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