The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicines. Government should reflect this . To what extent do you agree?

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Health

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is the state of complete harmony of

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prevention is better than cure.A healthy body reveals a healthy mind.I completely agree with the statement as well as the

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authorities must invest in

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care.

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essay will discuss how authorities can help to prevent disease.

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with,every person deserves a healthy lifestyle.,

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is literally rarely happening in our community due to pollution,contaminated cities and overcrowding.Most

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are following

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unhygienic lifestyle it will lead to many

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issues,especially in children.

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, in many underdeveloped countries

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as Nigeria, children are prone to get deadly diseases because of their poor infrastructure and poverty.

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has to provide financial investment to improve the living standard of

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in their country.Authorities should provide a free home with basic facilities.

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,every individual should get a nutritious diet from the

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health

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education is an important aspect of preventing illness.Especially in

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covid-19 season,

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should be aware of wearing a mask and cleaning their hands from time to time by demonstration or keeping posters in the village.Because

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is a new situation in folks life,even well-educated

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are getting infected with coronavirus

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what more the illiterate

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.Educating

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with adequate facilities which is soap and water,mask,gloves and so forth,

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is the responsibility of

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.All these preventing measures can control many

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issues as well as deaths in the population. To conclude,these can be provided only by the

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.It is impossible to implement by the individual because it needs economical investment.Underprivileged nations are getting financial support from rich countries.In my ,opinion

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amount to be invested for the needy

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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicines. Government should reflect this . To what extent do you agree?

New technologies and ways of buying and selling goods are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

As parents, they should be required to attend parenting courses every year to bring up their children well and give them a better environment for growth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is expected there will be a higher proportion of old people than young people in the future in some countries. Do you think it is positive or negative development?

In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions? .