Nowadays a large amount of advertising aiming at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I believe that maintaining a
credit
card
feels secure to me. Nowadays technology has developed a lot. Most
of
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the
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people
prefer online transactions
instead
of having hand cash because of two reasons for security purposes and for having offers.
Firstly
,
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theft cases are increasing day-by-day. So,
people
are having a fear of maintaining cash in their pocket. At that time the government introduced a
credit
card
policy,
people
can apply for
credit
cards in their own banks.
Moreover
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people
can use
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credit
card
in any public place like Shopping malls, restaurants, and grocery stores etc
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In the meantime,
people
don't panic about getting robbed because while we use the
credit
card
we have to enter the
four digit
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passcode. Later only we can withdraw the
amount
from our account. So, the public feels secured because of using
credit
cards for their payments.
Secondly
, in our
country
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most of the
people
were using hand cash only because they don't have much knowledge about recent trends.
However
, the government should give awareness to them through campaigns or by advertising.
For instance
, recently my uncle visited the shopping mall and he billed the
amount
of 50,000 INR. Later while billing, he gets to know that if he pays the
amount
through the
credit
card
means they will provide a 25% discount to him. To conclude, In my opinion,
people
will be benefited if they prefer
credit
cards for making payments. In the meantime, they can save some
amount
through the offers which are provided by the bank.
Also
, they don't have a fear
about
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thefts.
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