Q) Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoid any change. others, however, think that change is always a good thing. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, most of the young people are showing interest to do different types of works or activities in their daily
life
.
However
, mostly, adults are sticking to one type of
work
only, due to some reasons. In my point of view, both views have their pros and cons.
Moreover
, they will be discussed in the below paragraphs.
Firstly
, in the present generation, most of the teenagers are thinking to explore themselves. So they are showing interest to do different kind of works to gain some
experience
and knowledge.
For instance
, I am an extrovert person, I like to explore myself every moment. Everything in my
life
I will try to do it differently. Because of doing different types of
work
,
definitely
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we will gain some
experience
in that
work
. While in
this
process, we will get to know that, what to do and what not to do in our
life
.
Secondly
, of course, most of the adults believe that knowing one particular
work
, will give us more benefits in our
life
. Like getting promotions and it will help to gain a good name in society.
For instance
, my father is a government officer. From 1996 onwards, he is working in the same office as a public employer.
However
, in his career, he had 25 years of
experience
in the bank sector. While in
this
process, he gained a lot of respect, money, and knowledge. To conclude, some people were sticking to only one particular
work
, to gaining more
experience
. while some people thought that doing different kinds of
work
, will increase more knowledge about our society. In my opinion, by following both views in our
life
. We will be benefited in our daily
life
.
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