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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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It is argued that resident of many countries refers to have a
pernemant
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per cent
inhabition
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inhibition
 better than stay at a temporary dwelling.
Although
, some community believe that there are clear disadvantages of
this
 phenomenon. I would contend that the advantages are more significant. Regarding myriads of
advantageous
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 reason why people tend to purchase an
idenpendent
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independent
 house.
First
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 justification, the acquisition of
a
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private property may bring boost a financial budget from
this
 time forth. Take the example of, when owners possess a building with the cost of 3 billion VND. The value of dwelling will be increasing dramatically after 10 years. The
amount
 of
money
 can reach 10 billion VND. From
this
 point, the budget will increase to invest
other
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 projects.
This
 is a reason why the habitant tends to invest a land or a house for obtaining an
amount
 of
money
 in
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these days
those days
.
In addition
, A resident can be decorated based on individual personality. They can integrate a different colour with
a
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various materials which they interested in. A house
that is
 created becomes
a
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unique for itself. Simultaneously, they do not acquire a permit.
Moreover
, people purchase a private
housse
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house
 that they do not observe strict rules applied for tenants.
However
, it has many
of
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disadvantages that impact
on
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citizens. In a high-pressure society, many
of
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people
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 been making a determined effort to earning
amount
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of
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money
 for purchasing a dwelling
hence
 they suffer anxious matters for long a period of time . It is lead to having the mental health problems.
For instance
, According to the article which is posted on BBC news. It illustrates the percentage of suicide more and more increase due to pressure matters about earning an
amount
 of
money
 to buy a building for themselves in Japan All in all, it seems to me that we gain more than lose from
this
 movement because when we possess a dwelling place, we are easily able to develop ourselves for other purposes
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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