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Music has been and will continue to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Music
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 undoubtedly will proceed to be the common voice of mankind. I
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strongly
 agree
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 the above point which has
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myriad
 of benefits. The classical era helped the uprising of
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 to the planet.
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 with, the work of the composers like Beethoven and Wolfgang spread across many countries in no time.
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,
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 contributed to establishing it as a philosophy and taught in every continent without any barriers.
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,
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 work was learnt by many students
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 the globe which made the foundation of
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,
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 the common platform for everyone in the past.
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, even enemies
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 the battlefield
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 brave enough to stop a day of violence in world war 2 in Germany to conduct a
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 concert which
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 the impact of it. Technological advancements have helped the millennials to speak the mother tongue of
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.
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, anyone can listen and download
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 from iTunes and Youtube from any cultural background which has created an unbreakable bond with the young generation and it has been in the forefront to the
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speed
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 of it as well.
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, "Neverland" is a musical concert which is organized every year where thousands from different nationalities gather which creates camaraderie among youth.
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, to see more
music
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 masterpieces been brought to the limelight is a validation that tech has assisted the growth of it. In conclusion, it is evident that the hard work of the giants and the current
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 enthusiasts have laid a strong foundation to continue
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 as the universal language of people.
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