Some people think that young children need to attend nursery before primary school. While others believe young children can spend all day at home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people favour that
children
should attend prep classes before joining school
whilst others have a contrasting viewpoint. I believe prep classes help students to adopt the habit of staying away from homes for a few hours. Those who favour the statement that children
should stay at home state that children
are delicate at this
age
, it is better for them to be with family.
On one side, children
are vulnerable at this
age
, they need their parents
for basic things. They are not trained to use washrooms. They are not properly trained to eat their food. They have not developed of expressing things. Parents
are able to understand their needs. They help them to eat and use washrooms; nevertheless
, this
is not possible to be expected from the people who are not part of children
's family. Teachers of these primary school
cannot nurture the children
like parents
which is necessary at this
delicate age
. For example
, most of the children
are not trained enough to eat without help
of elders. Add an article
the help
Hence
, because children
are delicate at this
, it is better if they stay at home.
On the other side, children
practice the habit of staying away from their parents
in nursey. In school
, children
have to sit for longer
hours. There they will not be Replace the word
long
be
family. Remove the redundancy
apply
Initially
they will miss their homes and families. They may not be able to focus on Add a comma
,Initially
studies
and their education. If they Correct pronoun usage
their studies
be
to Change the verb form
are
nursery
, they will imbibe the habit of sitting. Add an article
the nursery
a nursery
This
will help in practising how to stay from their family. For example
, in starting days of school
children
who did not attend any classes before often cry and scream because they miss their family.
In conclusion, sending children
to nursery prepare them for their school
; nevertheless
, they are not mature at this
age
to be away from family. I believe they should be sent to nursery , this
will help them in future studies.Submitted by Priya on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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