Some people think that young children need to attend nursery before primary school. While others believe young children can spend all day at home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people favour that
children
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should attend prep classes before joining
school
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whilst others have a contrasting viewpoint. I believe prep classes help students to adopt the habit of staying away from homes for a few hours. Those who favour the statement that
children
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should stay at home state that
children
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are delicate at
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age
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, it is better for them to be with family. On one side,
children
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are vulnerable at
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age
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, they need their
parents
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for basic things. They are not trained to use washrooms. They are not properly trained to eat their food. They have not developed of expressing things.
Parents
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are able to understand their needs. They help them to eat and use washrooms;
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,
this
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is not possible to be expected from the people who are not part of
children
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's family. Teachers of these primary
school
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cannot nurture the
children
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like
parents
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which is necessary at
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delicate
age
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.
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, most of the
children
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are not trained enough to eat without
help
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the help
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of elders.
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, because
children
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are delicate at
this
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, it is better if they stay at home. On the other side,
children
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practice the habit of staying away from their
parents
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in nursey. In
school
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,
children
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have to sit for
longer
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hours. There they will not be
be
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family.
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Initially
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they will miss their homes and families. They may not be able to focus on
studies
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their studies
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and their education. If they
be
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are
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to
nursery
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the nursery
a nursery
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, they will imbibe the habit of sitting.
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will help in practising how to stay from their family.
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, in starting days of
school
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children
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who did not attend any classes before often cry and scream because they miss their family. In conclusion, sending
children
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to nursery prepare them for their
school
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;
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, they are not mature at
this
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age
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to be away from family. I believe they should be sent to nursery ,
this
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will help them in future studies.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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