CHILDREN SHOULD ALWAYS FOLLOW THEIR PARENTS’ ADVICE. TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT?

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complex society that depends upon abstracts signs, rules and behaviours. To make things more challenging, our development is slow. It takes a lot of time, effort and mistakes are
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we have at least some skills to deal with the
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nothing is perfect and there are situations in which following
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advice could not be the best thing to do.
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with case by case. To conclude, I would like to highlight the fact the
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of our society. The education of
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both the public and the private. For the sake of
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efficient and functional development in the process of
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preparation for living in communities is essential that parents receive all the available support and resources to provide for them. They should be respected by the sons and daughters and should provide for them the best advice and education.
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