CHILDREN SHOULD ALWAYS FOLLOW THEIR PARENTS’ ADVICE. TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT?

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agree with those who consider that

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should always follow their parents' advice. When

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beings in the animal

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complex society that depends upon abstracts signs, rules and behaviours. To make things more challenging, our development is slow. It takes a lot of time, effort and mistakes are

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, it is logical to let those who came before and conceived us

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we have at least some skills to deal with the

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life.

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advice could not be the best thing to do.

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, some parents could be Ignorants

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disorders. Some of them could be perfectly normal and educated, but biased and egocentric. Or even outdated and

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proud to admit. In these cases, there will be limits to the

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, these are exceptions and should be

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survival of our species depends upon on how of how efficient we are

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dealing with the

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is an endeavour that

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both the public and the private. For the sake of

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efficient and functional development in the process of

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preparation for living in communities is essential that parents receive all the available support and resources to provide for them. They should be respected by the sons and daughters and should provide for them the best advice and education.

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independence
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generational changes
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