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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays education institutions are relying more than ever on electronic devices
such
 as computers to assist
educating
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 their
students
. Some individuals believe that
this
 is a positive aspect
,
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 because it offers the student the opportunity to
study
 from anywhere in the world. Others,
however
, believe that not being in physical contact with the teacher or other
students
 will lead to negative consequences. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion way I think computers
is
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 a vital device in educating
students
. Some believe it is important to be physically present in the classroom because it
strengthen
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one
’s social skills, which can be used when interacting with
one
’s peers and co-workers in the work environment. In a recent
study
 in London, they viewed two groups of
students
. The
one
group
 was distance learning
students
 and the
second
group
 of
students
 physically attended classes at the university. Both
group
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 of
students
 completed the same course. The
study
 indicated that the
one
group
 who attended lessons in a classroom environment climbed the cooperate ladder much quicker and ended up in senior positions
,
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because their social skills
was
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 much better
then
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 the
group
 of
students
 who studied from home.
On the other hand
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my
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 personal
opion
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opinion
, being able to use your computer for studying purposes is a wonderful advantage, because it offers
one
 the opportunity to
study
 at a
time
that is
 convenient for you. In
this
 day and
age
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 a lot of people are working full
time
 and studying
part
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part-time
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time
.
In addition
, being able to
study
 from home limits
one
 commute
time
 which
students
 can use on their studies. In conclusion, attending classes physically may lead to better communication and people skills which could boost
one
 career.
However
, thanks to the internet and technology those who can not attend classes have the opportunity to
study
 online.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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