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More and more people nowadays are buying fashionable clothes. Does it have a more negative or positive effects? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.

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more tendency toward stylish material among the crowd is becoming common nowadays . while
this
 may cause social layering among the one community residents it
also
 has a positive effect on some other public . I strongly believe that
such
 phenomena have both advantageous and disadvantageous in equal manure . in term of positive effects, many folks feel more comfortable putting on a brand type of clothes especially when it comes to attend a very important meeting to leave a good impression about the local's way of life,
therefore
 more facilities to be recruited to their community.
furthermore
, fashioned stuff becomes a symbol of high status for many families in which they consider it as an advantage thing from their point of view. some society fluctuates economically ,they have a very huge gap between rich and poor . if more nation wears a stylish dress that might lead to increase the feeling of being condescended by people with low income posing the bond among both fashioned and nonfashioned very loose,
Moreover
,
such
 infiltration may raise the rate of crime . those who can not afford the price of fashioned material will consider stylish society as they are their enemies and give themselves the right to attack them.
in addition
, traditional wise, stylish materials might not be accepted because of their consequences
such
 as dissolving the principles which are followed for a long time by ancestors . In conclusion, using fashioned cotton more often is not only blooming but it
also
 might lead to various drawbacks. and that differs from one place to another
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