Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. discuss both these vies and give your own opinion.

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to accept a bad
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; like,
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a disatisfactory
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job or financial problems while
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of the people opine that improving
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situation
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will be more preferable. On the one hand, some
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as they believe to just go with the flow. Whenever any
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accure they do not try to take corrective steps even if they know the result would be worse.
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is perhaps, they want to learn from
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can get success after being
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or by learning from
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, when a student
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B grade for a
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69 marks, now when
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announces the result and give the answer paper to the students for reference, he finds the total of marks has mistaken, it does 70, with the 70 marks he will get
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time he did not
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the teacher
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to make correct, he wants to
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improve
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so as his mind can work more than previously. So the outcomes after the bad
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might be a leading factor of being successful.
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, other
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,
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they are unable to live with the
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they take corrective steps to improve the
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immediatly
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immediately
. They believe that if they do not respond to the bad
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situation
it will become worse.
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, they feel like they have to bear for a long time or lifetime.
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, A
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to a poor family work hard from his childhood and try to become a good business
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because he wants to overcome
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the shortage of money;
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, he and his family can
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come out
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. So, sometimes it is good to try to correct the
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. Here, in my opinion, A
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should behave as per the
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. To respond
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the bad
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situation
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or to let it be is
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totally
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upon the
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, If there is
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of
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corrective steps
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one should
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it is better to let it happen and accept the bad
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. To conclude, An individual
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to analyse the whole matter and only
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one should decide
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whether
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wether
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whether
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to
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improve it or to accept it as it is.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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