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Nowadays many people aim to create a balance between their work and other aspects of their life, however, only a few achieve it. What are the problems in doing this and what solutions can you suggest?

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Many
people
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 want to allocate enough
time
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 for both daily
life
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 and
work
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.
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, it is not easy for all
people
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 to establish
balance
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 between the aforementioned
things
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, and most of them can not succeed.I am of the opinion that
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 issue stems from
people
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’s wrong prioritizes and social
media
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.Yet, despite having problems about that, there are solutions for
alleviate
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 it like doing
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plan
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. Some
people
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 have
a
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trouble with
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 balanced
time
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work
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 and daily
work
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 because they prioritize one of them mostly. The meaning of
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 daily
work
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 can be spending
time
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 with friends or family namely socialization.
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 socialization can be meaningless
some
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of
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them because success and money are more valuable than other
things
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 according to some
people
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’s
life
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 aims.That’s why they are predisposed to
work
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in
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excessively .
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,
this
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prioritize
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 damages their daily works and it causes problems like excluded from their friends or family.Another reason is
people
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’ s addictiveness
in
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to
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 social
media
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. Because of
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 situation, many
people
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 refrain from
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 their daily works because they can not stay away from social
media
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 like
tiktok
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TikTok
. For the
tiktok
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TikTok
,
this
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 application
arrange
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homepage to attract users.Mostly, their services produce according to users demands. In
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 way , they can not stay away from these
applications
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 and they can not
fulfill
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 their responsibilities like
work
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 duties .
On the other hand
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, there are some solutions to establish between
work
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 and daily
life
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 works. The
first
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 key is doing
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plan
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a plan
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 because if it is done wisely, they can adjust themselves fully to
the
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everything like social and job
life
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.
For instance
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, it can be
scheduled
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a scheduled
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 daily
life
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 routine , and it can be
write
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 in a
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planning
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plan
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plain
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 notebook.In
this
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 way, they can see in
this
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 notebook what they have to manage like washing or studying.In
this
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 way, they can attach equal importance
for
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 all of them.Another thing is that eliminate some unnecessary
things
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 like some social
media
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applications
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 in our
life
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.These
things
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 which disrupt our
life
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 cause
to
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us to
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 lose
time
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. If we remove them from our lives because they are not useful to us, we can devote a balanced
time
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 to other
things
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. It can be happened by
people
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 to delete these
applications
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 like ınstagram or
tiktok
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TikTok
. To sum up, it can not be denied that putting prioritize
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 one
aspects
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 disrupt the balance of
work
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 and other
things
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.
Also
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,
this
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 unsuccessful balance stems from social
media
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 addictiveness.
However
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,
this
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 addictiveness can be handled by
people
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 to delete some
applications
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.And
also
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, doing
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plan
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in
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day to day enables
people
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 to
fulfill
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 their responsibilities. Attaching importance to scheduling in
everyday
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 can be beneficial too much.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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