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Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. what is the reason? is it positive or negative development ?

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At ,present there are a number of automated vehicles in the market due to advancement in the technology engineers makes the model with more distinct features so that consumers can get attracted towards these motor vehicle easily. In my opinion, negative points
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 technology because fully dependent on motor machines will have detrimental effects on health and are not fully trustworthy. There are a lot of traits
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 are useful for the individuals
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 as automated vans because most
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people in foreign countries are not aware that how to use these manual cars. As half of them started driving at
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 age on the artificial
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 vehicle.
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 command , it will drive you to your destination.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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