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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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Today's world is
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 past our imaginations compared to before is because of the development
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. There has been much discussion going on nowadays that
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 of out life was easier when the
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 was basic. I strongly disagree, as our day to day activities turned
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 easy because of the advancement. Previously, communication with others was only through one or two ways like the postal, telegraph, but now that was turned to
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 lot more chances like audio, video calls, emails with the use of social media and other platforms. To precise, we can call a person who is on either end of the poles with our highly sophisticated
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. Not only communication but
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 the
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 of life has changed a lot by the use of gadgets which made our day activates easier like a cakewalk.
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 to be simple, early morning coffee by vending machine will save time. Some still argue that technological improvement has made man a robot. These advancement has made him lose his emotional side by being himself more on online rather than spending time with elders compared to before .
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, we can still see cyber crimes are increasing drastically all over the world like fake bank transactions, money laundering.
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, they can be controlled by the latest updates in
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. Having considering both views, I strongly think
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 made our life easier compared to before. Even though it has a darker side like cybercrime increment, the developing
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 will definitely out ways the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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